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This is a poem from last year, a quasi sonnet:
Moth Whispers
Moth whispers brush the bedside lamp.
Summer’s here, with nightly fear
of fluttering, biting, stinging things.
Tossing, turning, sweating, burning
from daily overdose of sun.
Moth-wings tapping at lighted windows,
starlit nights with yearning filled.
Through winter’s dark she’d longed for summer,
sleeveless frocks and sun-browned limbs.
Freedom, lightness, like the moth-wings
flicker in untroubled youth.
Crept October soon upon her,
dreaming of Eros by frosty sky.
Autumn chill, and moth-wings still.
This is so well done…I could imagine every line as I read, and it flows so easily that one hardly notices he’s reading….but just having a thought. Nicely crafted, my friend.
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return favor to those who are here would set you off in a good run…
Cheers!
Happy Wednesday!
Happy Monday!
Thanks for the participation.
sparkling poem.
somehow reminded me of tulips (sylvia plath). though your poem is much quieter. loved it anyway.
I like that poem, it’s simple feeling and has a great flow.
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very beautiful, Vivienne!
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seasons and more…
Dreaming of Eros… Nice image. Love and Light, Sender
I love the concept of moth wings as it overlays the line of sunbrown arms. Simply lovely!
I remember this. A delicate poem.
ooooh! I can feel this piece…such rich texture and delivered upon the wings of a moth!
I am honoured to share another rally week with you!
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Yeah, you don’t think you’re gonna miss them little buggers til they’re gone, eh? Well done.
This is an amazing poem…evokes the seasons and changes so well. And you use such good sensory description.
Vivienne, I am a nut for Summer, this was wonderful for me it embodies many of the reason I love this season!
The poem is lovely to say out loud. It is a feast of words.
indeed a unique take on autumn
Well done! The yearning for summer the moment autumn has just begun is clearly evident in your poem. Now if only I can get rid of the moths in my kitchen!
“Freedom, lightness, like the moth-wings
flicker in untroubled youth.”
well written indeed!
love autumn chill,
a poem in depth, well written…
Thanks for sharing!
admirable job.
love your instant response and sincere support.
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