Wind and water

Posted on October 9, 2015 by https://vivinfrance.wordpress.com

Breeze breeds a gust
gust grows into squall
squall expands to gale
gale hurries hurricane

A gust grows into a wild wet squall
rocks the boat as they shorten sail
sit over the side of the little yawl.

Continuous squalls expand to gale
as crew in fear decides to hail
the lifeboat – pray let it not fail

Gale becomes a hurricane
lifeboat hesitates, constrained
remains in port. The elements prevail.

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a horrid trimeric poem for dVerse and Octpowrimo day 9, where the prompt is to write about the elements.

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29 Responses to Wind and water

  1. Gillena Cox says:
    October 10, 2015 at 14:06

    good that they stayed in the harbour and didn’t get caught out in the storm
    have a nice Saturday

    much love…

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  2. Candy says:
    October 10, 2015 at 04:52

    made me want to grab my raincoat 🙂

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  3. Connie Mae Inglis says:
    October 10, 2015 at 02:20

    I love the onomatopoeia.

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  4. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:
    October 10, 2015 at 02:17

    Though the form doesn’t have to rhyme, I very much like the way you’ve used rhyme to good effect.

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  5. jazzytower says:
    October 10, 2015 at 01:07

    Elements prevail indeed. Even the rescuer is staying put. Nice imagery.

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  6. Victoria C. Slotto says:
    October 9, 2015 at 22:53

    This made me think of the coasts of Brittany where the perils of the sea are so real. I felt the influence of your setting in this.

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  7. katiemiafrederick says:
    October 9, 2015 at 20:34

    Hurricane heArt sMiLEs wiND..
    SpiRit ExpresSinG HearT..
    SoUl Balancing..
    Body and Mind…

    spiRit ExpresSinG HearT
    Move.. connect.. create..
    Body and MiNd Balance..

    SoUl Balancing
    Time is now..
    only now..

    Body and Mind
    Bride and Groom
    ONE practice Storm..:)

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  8. Cindy says:
    October 9, 2015 at 18:09

    definitely enjoyed the chain of events… 🙂 Well penned!!

    I like discovering new forms. Looks like I have a new one to experiment with.

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  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:
    October 9, 2015 at 18:07

    Oh, we better stay inside and huddle I thinks. I like your variation to the form

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  10. writersdream9 says:
    October 9, 2015 at 17:41

    Crescendo effect!! 🙂

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  11. georgeplace2013 says:
    October 9, 2015 at 14:30

    Very timely as Joaquin did some damage on the coast. Storms can be peaceful and violent-you showed the extremes well.

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  12. ivywalker says:
    October 9, 2015 at 14:09

    This builds some excitement. Im a bit of an open seas storm nut…its not smart but i love them!

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  13. Sanaa Rizvi says:
    October 9, 2015 at 14:07

    Such a strong & effective use of the form 🙂

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  14. Janet says:
    October 9, 2015 at 13:38

    enjoyed the storm:) love how you built up to it.

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  15. Karin says:
    October 9, 2015 at 13:22

    Late last evening, I was talking about the weather extremes of the Canadian Maritimes and they are very much like you’ve captured here. I do admit a fondness for storms though 🙂

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  16. Nithya Venkat says:
    October 9, 2015 at 13:18

    Weather portrayed in all power and strength.

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  17. Gabriella says:
    October 9, 2015 at 12:59

    I wonder whether your poem was a response to recent weather conditions that affected your area and the seamen there.

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  18. Mary says:
    October 9, 2015 at 12:58

    Ah, you have shown well how a breeze can build to a hurricane. I liked the progression. And..yes, it was an interesting variation of the Trimeric form!

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  19. Grace says:
    October 9, 2015 at 12:33

    Well best to wait in safety until the storm passes by ~

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  20. tialys says:
    October 9, 2015 at 12:25

    I got a little nauseous reading this – I get seasick in the bath 😦

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  21. Sumana Roy says:
    October 9, 2015 at 09:56

    love this variation of the form….

    Like

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  22. katechiconi says:
    October 9, 2015 at 09:24

    Very evocative. Poor little dinghy…

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  23. Deepti says:
    October 9, 2015 at 09:09

    Elements somehow glide smoothly in this write… 🙂

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  24. Misky says:
    October 9, 2015 at 08:51

    RNLI to the rescue!

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