Wind and water

Breeze breeds a gust
gust grows into squall
squall expands to gale
gale hurries hurricane

A gust grows into a wild wet squall
rocks the boat as they shorten sail
sit over the side of the little yawl.

Continuous squalls expand to gale
as crew in fear decides to hail
the lifeboat – pray let it not fail

Gale becomes a hurricane
lifeboat hesitates, constrained
remains in port. The elements prevail.

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a horrid trimeric poem for dVerse and Octpowrimo day 9, where the prompt is to write about the elements.

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29 Responses to Wind and water

  1. Gillena Cox says:

    good that they stayed in the harbour and didn’t get caught out in the storm
    have a nice Saturday

    much love…

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  2. Candy says:

    made me want to grab my raincoat 🙂

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  3. I love the onomatopoeia.

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  4. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Though the form doesn’t have to rhyme, I very much like the way you’ve used rhyme to good effect.

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  5. jazzytower says:

    Elements prevail indeed. Even the rescuer is staying put. Nice imagery.

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  6. This made me think of the coasts of Brittany where the perils of the sea are so real. I felt the influence of your setting in this.

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  7. Hurricane heArt sMiLEs wiND..
    SpiRit ExpresSinG HearT..
    SoUl Balancing..
    Body and Mind…

    spiRit ExpresSinG HearT
    Move.. connect.. create..
    Body and MiNd Balance..

    SoUl Balancing
    Time is now..
    only now..

    Body and Mind
    Bride and Groom
    ONE practice Storm..:)

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  8. Cindy says:

    definitely enjoyed the chain of events… 🙂 Well penned!!

    I like discovering new forms. Looks like I have a new one to experiment with.

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  9. Oh, we better stay inside and huddle I thinks. I like your variation to the form

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  10. Crescendo effect!! 🙂

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  11. Very timely as Joaquin did some damage on the coast. Storms can be peaceful and violent-you showed the extremes well.

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  12. ivywalker says:

    This builds some excitement. Im a bit of an open seas storm nut…its not smart but i love them!

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  13. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Such a strong & effective use of the form 🙂

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  14. Janet says:

    enjoyed the storm:) love how you built up to it.

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  15. Karin says:

    Late last evening, I was talking about the weather extremes of the Canadian Maritimes and they are very much like you’ve captured here. I do admit a fondness for storms though 🙂

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  16. Weather portrayed in all power and strength.

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  17. Gabriella says:

    I wonder whether your poem was a response to recent weather conditions that affected your area and the seamen there.

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  18. Mary says:

    Ah, you have shown well how a breeze can build to a hurricane. I liked the progression. And..yes, it was an interesting variation of the Trimeric form!

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  19. Grace says:

    Well best to wait in safety until the storm passes by ~

    Liked by 1 person

  20. tialys says:

    I got a little nauseous reading this – I get seasick in the bath 😦

    Liked by 2 people

  21. Sumana Roy says:

    love this variation of the form….

    Like

  22. katechiconi says:

    Very evocative. Poor little dinghy…

    Liked by 1 person

  23. Deepti says:

    Elements somehow glide smoothly in this write… 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  24. Misky says:

    RNLI to the rescue!

    >

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