Jisei – Tanka

Refusal to consider
the moment of my going ─
too close for comfort
better not to waste time fretting ─
enjoy every precious second

Probably too simplistic an interpretation of Gayle’s excellent prompt, to write a Japanese death poem, but my words are from the heart.

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25 Responses to Jisei – Tanka

  1. Time wasted fretting is just that….time wasted!

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  2. Wonderful, wise thoughts, Viv.

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  3. And you must please keep on refusing!


  4. Bryan Ens says:

    I like how you took the theme of the death poem and turned it on its head to become a piece about enjoying life. Quite nice!

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  5. Much wisdom in this, I think, for any age! Nice last words indeed!


  6. Mary says:

    I like your forthright approach! And I share your philosophy.


  7. I like the first two lines. They are so honest, they hit me in the gut. I don’t like looking at it either.

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  8. Kathy Reed says:

    Nice to have an ‘up’ attitude…take advantage of every day of living. The joy is here to find.

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  9. MarinaSofia says:

    I fully agree with that attitude! May be a little too direct for traditional Japanese jisei, but it’s heartfelt!

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  10. thotpurge says:

    Sometimes it’s not morbid or wasteful..perhaps just puts things in perspective.. Sometimes..to think about mortality.

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  11. The moments of living are really too valuable to waste pondering about death – so valid


  12. Ah.. time an idea..
    but never a reality
    until it is measured
    in imagination past
    nows future presents
    present is alive
    as Present…:)


  13. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    Oh, well said!

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  14. kanzensakura says:

    Excellent! Every moment truly is precious – don’t fret – good advice. My husband turned 55 today. I turn 64 in November. my how the time flies when one is enjoying those precious moments.

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  15. Good for you, Viv. I can see you do just that!

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  16. Candy says:

    wise words indeed

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  17. Suzanne says:

    Well said. It does seem fatalistic to be thinking about death when there is so much living to do.

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  18. Sherry Marr says:

    I feel exactly the same way! Still so much to do!

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  19. Misky says:

    Here here, Viv. I have no wish to spend precious time contemplating my end. >

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  20. Bodhirose says:

    I get it, Viv. No, certainly the idea is not to fret but maybe to celebrate our lives…just not too soon. Thanks for joining us in the prompt today.
    Gayle ~


  21. Grace says:

    Enjoy those precious seconds ~ I always try not to worry too much nor waste time fretting ~

    Thanks Viv for linking up with D’verse ~


  22. katechiconi says:

    Love this! My mortality is still hopefully a fair way off consideration, but the last couple of years have certainly brought home the immediacy and speed of the ageing process. Some of the effects are not always distasteful, I find it interesting how wrinkles add resemblance! https://talltalesfromchiconia.wordpress.com/2013/09/25/ageing

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