Dialogue for dVerse


“Why must you leave me alone?
You’ll be alone all the time soon,
You could stay and keep me company.
We could chat – about anything
or nothing.  Remember.
Remembering is good.
Remember Potain?
He was something else –
he had the power
to make our lives miserable.
And he did.”

“Why should I want to remember Potain?
You talk such rubbish most of the time.
I’d rather go to my room and listen to music.”

It makes no sense
but eavesdroppers rarely catch
anything more interesting than a cold.

Vivtoria at dVerse suggests we have a go at a dialogue poem:  I thought it wouls be easy,.  It was anything but!  Do go and read some the accomplished poetry  of other pubgoers.

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13 Responses to Dialogue for dVerse

  1. Very interesting bit of dialogue. Like Bjorn said it conveys so many things. More interesting than a cold, I think 🙂

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  2. lynn__ says:

    Good dialogue, Viv! LOVE the last line 🙂

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  3. This reminds me some 7.7 years ago
    or so.. when i lose my emotions
    all feelings of warm and
    fuzzy.. sitting at the
    edge of my mother’s
    bed knowing there is
    that warm comfort
    once and asking
    her wasn’t
    i ever happy
    i know i
    was but
    i never
    knew all
    feelings can go away…
    and that’s all that really
    counts.. FeeLinGs.. THE LessOn.. FEELS


  4. ‘Eavesdropping’ had naughty connotations universally. But here you’ve given it acceptance and it went smoothly in the dialog.


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  5. Just loved the reference to eavesdropping–and the conversation flowed well, Viv. Thanks for joining in.

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  6. You’ve captured it, Viv!! Nice way to close as well. 🙂


  7. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    This is so intriguing… I like the reference to Potain.


  8. Sumana Roy says:

    lots to be found in this brief conversation & i second Björn….nice witty lines…

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  9. Conversation in life or in writing are hard enough. But to be challenged to put it in verse would be overwhelming. You did a good job of it.


  10. Mary says:

    I think it is fascinating when one has time to listen in on others’ conversations. As I am not familiar with Potain, I checked online…and came up with nothing. The conversation whetted my curiosity.

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  11. Grace says:

    Hopefully not a cold but snippets of some other people’s lives ~ Riding the subway everyday, I catch all kinds of funny and weird conversations too ~

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  12. I found this eavesdropping extremely interesting.. it contains a lot of open ends, it’s really sends emotions of despair, of loneliness and dependence.. and indeed a cold in a way.

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