Anthem revisited

God save our gracious Queen
I’ve no quarrel with that,
but as a national anthem
it falls a little flat.
The tune is banal
and the words are not much better.
Send her victorious
happy and glorious
makes me think of bloody war
and grieving tears – I’d rather
an anthem of love and respect.

Her principal role as protector
of ethos and style,
gives us pride in our nation
without  domination.
Crown and sceptre are all very well,
but the way we live is more important.
Help for the helpless,
a hand up for the fallen,
somewhere to live in dignity for all
with scope for ingenuity
enterprising invention
to pursue unabated our glorious history.

at dVerse Poet’s Pub, a recent prompt was to look at our National Anthem and perhaps re-write, or write a new one.  In a very busy week, I missed the window for that one, but yesterday’s prompt works just as well:  to use an excess of modifiers, which goes against the grain with most writers, me included, so I haven’t followed the prompt to the letter!


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15 Responses to Anthem revisited

  1. Kathe W. says:

    Some folks complain about our USA anthem being too bloody and warlike. However those folks forget how we got here in the first place and want to rewrite history. We’re evolving, but that does not change the past. I like your 6 words and ode to your anthem!

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  2. Funnily enough we were talking about National Anthems earlier today and whether, or not, they are appropriate to our present day lives. We decided that on the whole they aren’t!

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  3. gillena says:

    nice; think i’ll try this on Monday since it will be the anniversary of Independence here in Trinidad and Tobago and a national holiday 🙂

    much love…

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  4. New anthem for the 21st century; love and respect indeed. x

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  5. There’re many powerful lines in this, Viv, the sentiments in the closing stanza…a wise guideline for right-living, in my opinion. Well done!

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  6. lynn__ says:

    A sensible treatise, sensibly modified 🙂

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  7. kaykuala h says:

    Glad that it is taken at a lighter mood as an anthem is certainly a serious endeavor to whip up patriotism


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  8. What a great way to respond to both prompts.. for sure those modifiers are there in every anthem.. especially the superlative… every country is for sure the best in every anthem

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  9. I think many of us resonate with a certain disappointment when we really listen to the words of our Anthems. Ours never ceases to move me because of what it stands for, but I’d love it if they sang a verse that wasn’t so war-saturated. I was impressed with an understanding of the principal role of the British Monarch–can’t say I’d ever heard that before.

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  10. Glenn Buttkus says:

    Words are important, they are all we have to fully communicate with, whether silly rap or rock or anthem–but you are so right, we have conditioned ourselves to not take lyrics very seriously; yet in the case of Leonard Cohen, Joni Mitchell, & Bolb Dylan, they are poets who put music to their words. Your point is well taken though, what we need more of is Love.

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  11. Oh.. a song of monarchy is lonely song
    at top.. oh.. a song of democracy
    tries to get along.. ah.. a song
    of human
    IT ALL
    wITh LOVE..;)

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  12. whimsygizmo says:

    Fun mashup, Viv. 🙂


  13. claudia says:

    yep – i agree – the words of an anthem are not so important as what the nation does – helping the helpless, caring for the poor and the government should create a political climate which makes that possible


  14. Grace says:

    I agree with you on this line: I’d rather
    an anthem of love and respect. Thanks for responding to both prompts Viv ~

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  15. rosross says:

    Multi-tasking with multi-prompting, well done and whimsical to boot!

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