After a morning looking after an enchanting six-year-old girl….


Vieillesse  et jeunesse
ont beaucoup en comun
sauf  excès d’énergie

la musique démarre
nous commençons à danser
tout le monde bouge

L’enthousiasme règne
bras, jambes et corps partout
le rythme accelère

Vieillards ralentissent
la fille virevolte en pirouette
pour les vieux – finis.

which translates more or less as:

Old age and youth
have much in common
except vitality

Music starts to play
we all begin to dance
everyone moves

Enthusiasm reigns
arms, legs and bodies everywhere\
the pace accelerates

Stiff pensioners wilt
lithe girl twirls in pirouette
the oldies are spent.


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12 Responses to Vanquished

  1. catterel says:

    Love this – did you write both versions more or less simultaneously, or did one of them come first? (I sometimes find lines alternating in different languages and don’t know how to deal with that!)

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  2. So much fun in the dance of Life!! Lovely to reflect upon, Viv. 🙂

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  3. katechiconi says:

    Lovely, but la version française est plus expressif, à mon avis, not that my French is up to much. It just sounds prettier…

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  4. That was delightful and true. :)) I’m smiling all the way through at the thought.


  5. I completely relate. It was our friend Ann’s birthday this past weekend and we hand the grand babies over, on and off, for three days. They are amazing children, all three, and I was amazingly exhausted at the end of it all.
    loved reading you poem in French. Something I would never attempt so I stand in awe.

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  6. Misky says:

    This gave me endless smi

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