Pseudo Psapphic Ode

The Napowrimo prompt a few days ago was for a poem in Sapphic metre.  Being devoid of inspiration I had the idea of writing a Sapphic Ode, as you do.   I read the instructions on the Napo page, Then I read the example given and the rhythm sounded lumpy to me. 

The recipe was: quatrains whose first three lines have eleven syllables, and the fourth, just five. There is also a very strict meter that alternates trochees (a two-syllable foot, with the first syllable stressed, and the second unstressed) and dactyls (a three-syllable foot, with the first syllable stressed and the remainder unstressed). The first three lines consist of two trochees, a dactyl, and two more trochees. The fourth line is a dactyl, followed by a trochee.Thus a stanza would read as:

Dum di dum di dum diddy dum di dum di   x3
Dum diddy dum di

Far be it from me to criticise such an ancient form, but I think it is frightfully bad style to end a stanza (and poem) on a weak beat.  So I consulted Wikipedia and recoiled before a page of gobbledook.  

Never one to give up at the first hurdle, I had a go, but instead of giving up, my horse fell at the first jump line

Poetry should be a pleasure
Rhythm dance in every measure
Words beguile as jewelled treasure
Not a rigid straitjacket.

Ah well, I tried.


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4 Responses to Pseudo Psapphic Ode

  1. You’ve so much more poetic patience than I…big kudos to you, Viv! 🙂

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  2. colonialist says:

    Much better thus!
    If one took::
    Poetry should be rhythmic’ly giving pleasure
    It would amount to an oxymoron!

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