BLAZON

Margo Roby has suggested we write a blazon poem and you will find the recipe at her blog.

I found that it was supposed to be about a woman’s body:  this one isn’t.  I don’t think my poem is technically a blazon – more of a riddle – but what the heck.   

 

 

Lower level miners work in sprawling tunnels
…….out of sight – a solid underpinning
emerges, surrounded by a mulch of old clothing,
…….an expansive  up-thrust of strength
swarming with life above and below the surface –
…….vital connective tissue
prepares to undertake some mammoth task,
…….to serve mankind.
Side-roads, broad at first, wave at the world,
…….narrowing as they climb the central artery.
A sweet river  defies gravity, feeds the extremities,
……from.core to pinnacle.
Many garments,  hard or feathery or leathery, cover him,
…….hide inhabitants from view.
The whole, a massive undertaking,
…….endures.

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12 Responses to BLAZON

  1. I think this is brilliant, Viv. I picture your image of miners and am able to conjure up the anatomy and physiology of the body in it. So much that goes on withing us that we don’t see or even think of until there’s a problem.

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  2. margo roby says:

    The reason you might feel this is blazon-ish is that it doesn’t sound like Breton, but it shouldn’t. It should sound like ViV [well, ViV’s speaker]. You have a blazon. It does what I think a modern blazon should, detail the attributes of a given subject. I love that you chose a mine. Beyond the people in it, you make it sound like a living creature.

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  3. I love how this feels like a busy-busy hive, and all of the intricacies of their work hidden below the surface. Very visual description…I enjoyed this, Viv!

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