We’ve enjoyed a week of summer

Sitting, sipping tea,  soaking up warmth and being free to read or snooze on the sunlit patio.
Bliss.  The sunshade umbrella has been in use, and friends have joined us in our mini-paradise.

I’ve been struggling a bit this week with Napowrimo:  For fear of reprisals, I protected yesterday’s poem with a password, but the WordPress system doesn’t give room to explain how  legit readers obtain the password – you need to email me for it.   So hardly anyone has read it.  Tant pis.

Anyway today’s offering is much more lighthearted.  The Napo prompt for Day 19  is to write a Rubaiyat , which basically is 4 line stanzas and a rhyme pattern of a, a, b, a.

In olden days a poem was supposed to rhyme
None of that freestyle wandering like mine
strict moon and June was the kind of tune
that led to poems far from sublime.

Was it doggerel they introduced?
Too much rhyme is poetry abused
too strict a metre with rhyme strewn
willy nilly, singsong is produced.

Slant rhyme, half rhyme, no rhyme
can charm us most of the time,
and to rhythm most are not immune
but  overdone, each becomes a crime.


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17 Responses to Six-word-Saturday

  1. Melanie says:

    Paradise and poetry. Just what I needed. Thanks!


  2. Mlissabeth says:

    Your description of your “paradise” sounds like it is precisely that. I enjoyed your poem, too.


  3. Judy says:

    Loved the poem. Envious of your wonderful weather.


  4. restlessjo says:

    Practise is definitely making perfect, Viv! Love your Rubaiyat. Sipping in the sunshine sounds good, too. 🙂


  5. Karen S. says:

    Oh lucky you! We had a couple of nice days, and more winter, but now we are hoping the weather is improving. I am wishing you a most happy of Easters. Enjoy every second!


  6. hilary says:

    I am jealous.. it is still really cold here


  7. Wayne. says:

    There is nothing better in this world than sitting on a patio on a lovely day enjoying a beverage and conversing with some good friends.


  8. Romi C says:

    I have read Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam in translation, but I didn’t know it also refers to a format of a poem. Your “Rubaiyat” sounds great.

    Have a nice weekend!


    • It was yesterday’s Napowrimo prompt, and I quote: “Today I challenge you to write a ruba’i. What’s that? Well, it’s a Persian form — multipe stanzas in the ruba’i form are a rubaiyat, as in The Rubaiyat of Omar Khayyam. Basically, a ruba’i is a four-line stanza, with a rhyme scheme of AABA. Robert Frost’s famous poem Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening uses this rhyme scheme. You can write a poem composed of one ruba’i, or try your hand at more, for a rubaiyat. Happy writing!”


  9. Ron. says:

    1) I AM jealous about your weather, V. On Monday, we had summery sun, temps worthy of T-shirts. that was one day. Today’s a different story.

    2) Re the rubaiyat: I’ve been struggling with NaPoWriMo too, using some of the prompts, sometimes, usually a couple days after they’re posted. This one seems like a do-er. Maybe.


    • Mine are often late too. The problem is that my writing “window” is first thing in the morning, in bed, and most of the prompts being from Western time zones, don’t arrive until much later. I’d be happy if you read my password-protected poem: pesky poet
      is the open sesame, but don’t tell anyone!


  10. colonialist says:

    Going out to enjoy the sunlight and then screened from the sun?
    Oh, OK.
    A proper meter is a must –
    Without it, poetry’s a bust –
    And not to use a rhyming word
    Is simply something quite ab… ridiculous! 🙂


  11. Oh Viv I am so impressed with your dedication. So glad you are having a relaxing holiday – enjoy


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