Anticlimax

Trifecta sets us quite a challenge this week:  exactly 33 words on love gone wrong WITHOUT using the words:  love, sad, tears, wept, heart, pain

Remember that initial buzz,
the sparkle putting a glow on life
on meeting your special person?

Remember then the grief
that turns your life to grey
when he spurns you, turns you loose.

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11 Responses to Anticlimax

  1. Momo says:

    I loved “turns your life to grey” and turns you loose. So evocative. Excellent!

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  2. I love ‘turns you loose’. Makes me think of tornadoes or wild animals. Nicely done.

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  3. Christine says:

    I love pieces that all readers can relate to. I’m willing to bet most people remember both of these moments. Beautifully written, Viv.

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  4. Yes, I remember all too well. And you presented both feelings perfectly. 🙂

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  5. Glynis says:

    It’s so sad, when love turns

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  6. I would agree.. that turn.. couldn’t be worse…

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  7. Draug419 says:

    Lots to remember here. Awesome work!

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  8. jyotsnabhatia86 says:

    Yes, totally remember both the feelings.. gud attempt !

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  9. jannatwrites says:

    So sad when love turns out this way.

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  10. KymmInBarcelona says:

    Spurn. What a great word.

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