American sentences

dVerse Poets Pub wants 17 syllable American sentences, (a type of haiku) with juxtaposition or contrasting thoughts. The space allowed seemed small
until I tried: I could have used fewer syllables to achieve the same effect!

Walking exercise, pick up litter – dual aim, healthy tidiness.


Sleeping mind works subconsciously, as body rests, reverse on waking.


Treetops sway before the wind as grasses whisper of secrets unseen.
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16 Responses to American sentences

  1. Sherry Marr says:

    Lovely, Viv, especially the last one….sigh.


  2. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade) says:

    I too love the last in particular, but all are interesting. Amazing how much meaning can be packed into such a brief form.


  3. hypercryptical says:

    Love the last especially. I am a litter picker-upper too.
    Anna :o]


  4. shanyns says:

    That last one is just enchanting. A very nice set.


  5. colonialist says:

    Very effectively done!
    I don’t suppose they would take kindly to:
    Danged varmint, this town ain’t big enough for both of us – I’m outta here!


  6. each of these tells a story. Quite an accomplishment.


  7. claudia says:

    nice…picking up litter on a walk you do something for your health and for the environment…and i love to listen to the grass whispering….nice


  8. I love the first and third esp.,Viv


  9. Misky says:

    The last one is brilliant. Love it.


  10. Oh I really love the last one. Very nice!


  11. They really aren’t that easy, are they? This challenge was a bit out of my comfort zone but I think you did remarkably well with it.

    I see you out picking up and enjoying a late autumn day speaking French, exchanging pleasantries; then the theme recurs in the last one finding secrets in the grass and in the trees – they are everywhere of course but so much more so in France (maybe because the secrets are French not English 🙂 ) And yes sleep sometimes feels so weird – when your mind wants to stay up doing and thinking, and your body says “I need to stop now!” – ha. Very clever sentences, Viv.


  12. brian miller says:

    ha. the reverse on waking…sometimes i think i think more when i am sleeping than in the walking around day….smiles.


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