Arrière Pensées

RJ Clarken at Poetic Bloomings wants us to write a Pensée, a syllabic poem with a stanza of 2 – 4 – 7 – 8 – 6 syllables. Line one is the subject, line 2 is description, line 3 is action line 4 is the setting and line 5 is final thoughts on the poem.

I loathe syllable counting poems, and to add insult to injury, the Octpowrimo prompt today is to write in or about NUMBERS which I dislike almost as much. I think you can tell, from the poems!

of five numbers
helps the postman to find you.
Our new home in le Clos des Champs
is five O two one O


define people,
identify motor cars
which might be stolen or speeding.
Know my name, not number.

My Social Security  and Tax numbers are about 14 characters long.  Is it any wonder I can’t remember them?  I can remember car numbers in sequence since My Uncle’s Wolseley in 1944, but not the current one!


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13 Responses to Arrière Pensées

  1. Well done! I love how you not only rise to a poetic challenge, but clobber it in the face and stomp right on over it 🙂


  2. Remember Patrick McGoohan? “They’re giving you a number and taking ‘way your name…” Secret Agent! I can’t believe you hated the form, yet you wrote TWO. Are you a masochist, or just extraordinarily creative? I go for #2. Amy


  3. Christine says:

    Love it! That last line really packs a punch, and you make an important point. We are not numbers! We are human beings.


  4. anxiousgeek says:

    Makes me think of the tv show The Prisoner.


  5. Shah Wharton says:

    I loath numbers and cheated 🙂 You didn’t because you are brave! And hey, you did it well! 🙂


  6. hpliebekraft says:

    You wouldn’t like mine–it’s a syllable count.
    Even though you don’t like numbers, you did well!


  7. I like the post code poem and well the second one tOO – don’t know which one I like more.


  8. snlkc says:

    Good work ! Short and perfect 🙂


  9. Postcode..Oh yes! 🙂 Cherished memories..:)


  10. restlessjo says:

    You’re clever, you are (if a tiny touch grumpy on occasion 🙂 )
    Another smiley start to my wet day, Viv. Cheers!


  11. colonialist says:

    You did well on a prompt you didn’t like!
    The answer to all personal number questions is, of course, cucumber.


  12. Q says:

    I really like the rhythm of the first poem! I sympathize, when I saw the numbers prompt I got nauseous. 🙂


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