……..…Layers compress in my heart
……………..connections yield to a range of fertile pressures
……..vessels shrink and close
…………………………………………….. life-anchor shifts
………………………………… scene fades
………………and all around is panic
someone
calls
for
atropine
Inside I am calm. I’ve heard it all before.
I vaguely catch the repeated phrase
…………….“Stand clear: shocking.”
Whoomp, thump
current is cut
pause
………………………………………………..a tiny beam of life returns
……………………………..the fuzzy scene begins to re-appear
………………..a ring of smiling blue-clad faces
………tells me I am in the clear
again.
Today’s Wordle words were: heart connect yield close phrase beam current fertile anchor range shift layers You’ll find a huge variety of interpretations of these words here Also linked at dVerse for Open Link Night
I believe you have accurately described what so many experience. In that transition time of wondering if one will be returning or just watching the scene play out… I like the visual as well.
Stay healthy and thanks for your visit.
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Glad she’s okay! Wow!
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Wow VIv. This reads like an account of an out-of-body experience. All the details are there – and all perfectly described, but so calmly, which is such a contrast to the usual presentations of the subject.
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Chilling in it’s details.
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Viv, the way you wrote this adds to the impact of the situation. Vivid piece. Take care of yourself.
Pamela ox
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It’s the details that make this narrative real for the reader – the atropine, the whump-thump, the current cut – a vivid experience that catches you and never lets go. Powerful.
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Awesome poem. Seamless in weaving the words together coherently. -Mike
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Wow… You took the words and created our greatest fear in a poetic tale. Your presentation enhanced the progression. Well done.
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Viv, you had my heart beating hard here! Intense indeed. You wordled your truth well.
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geez that is intense…what a vivid and scary moment there…almost out of body and back in…seeing what is going on around you even as the line flattens…hearing the voices…shivers…intense viv…
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Viv- This is intense… is it about you?
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Yes, a blend of several recent events. I don’t think such an experience could be imagined: it has to be real.
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This feels real to me–and the structure really lends to the quick intensity of the piece–great job!
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I’m afraid it is real.
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Sounds like a shocking experience, I soo love the fragmented writing and those beacons of details .. and now in the clear.
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Grateful that you are still here!
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A somewhat shocking interpretation! 🙂
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Maybe, but effective
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Powerful wording, Viv, and a little scary on the side.
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Oh yikes! How scary. I really like the visual presentation, the pauses created. This:
“Whoomp, thump
current is cut
pause”
… is my favorite.
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Oh my goodness, Viv…your fragmented style visually and vocally is such a fit for your topic. So scary. Well done on more than one level. So glad you’re here. ❤
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Thanks Hannah: trying times.
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So sorry. Hugs
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just what I need!
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Viv, this is about as realistic an account – the blow-by-blow description – of a cardiac episode as I’ve ever read. My dad had one in his 50s and completely changed his lifestyle. He died at 81 – but he skiied (the “bunny slopes”) on his 80th birthday. Amy
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It’s nearly twenty years since my first, and I spent my last birthday in hospital getting over the last.
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It’s spread out with a sense of chaos and yet there is this feeling of being above it. It feels very real. Great use of the words.
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Made me shudder. I have a dicky ticker myself, but I’ve not stepped down that shocking path yet.
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Vivid and real. Glad you’re okay.
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Oh, my word. This is amazing, Viv.
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Beautiful flow and so smoothly, Viv! One is most happy of being cleared, certainly!
Hank
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Oh wow….
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Holy smokes Viv, I’m so glad you are here to tell the tale. Brilliant use of the words. 🙂
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Wow. I knew that it was your own experience that I was reading and it felt so intense but your voice was calm, which calmed me. Such a powerful poem.
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Whew. Do, please, take care of your silly self.
Need to pass this along to Jim. He’s always needing patient viewpoints for his students.
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Nicely done. And a joy to read!
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Heaved a sigh of relief when I reached mid way and loved the direction it took from there 😉 even literally!!
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Oh, I lived to tell the tale!
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The layout of your words added to the energy of your poem until I read “in the clear”!
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I hope I am out cold if that happens to me. I don’t want to hear them say “We have lost him”.
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I was out cold when they shocked me, but it’s amazing what peripheral stuff percolates through.
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One of your best, Viv. It’s like it happened to you… 😉
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It is vivid. I like that there is calm in a crisis.
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Whew! Very vivid and incredibly real. Can see why you used the words in this fashion. Startling interpretation, Viv.
Elizabeth
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