Wordle 96

wordle 96

Candlelight is kind to old faces,
smoothes the wrinkles.
Under the glow, the years
are held in suspense,
hiding from the cruelty
of a naked bulb.

Botox and surgery
are not the door to re-birth
as an imaginary younger you.
Lacking signs of a life lived well ,
all character has scurried away.

At the root of all such foolishness
is vanity.
Stay in the gentle candlelight,
and continue to be you.

I’m not yet happy with this and will probably tinker a bit for days, so any ideas for improvement will be welcome.

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25 Responses to Wordle 96

  1. love it. the sound of the words ‘candlelight is kind to old faces’ and I completely agree with the sentiment. Nicely done.

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  2. Tumblewords says:

    How very true and poetic, too!

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  3. brenda w says:

    I agree with the ideas, Viv. My hair is slowly turning gray, and I’m not good friends with make up, even. A metaphor of some kind might spice it up. As it stands, I did enjoy the read.

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  4. Pamela says:

    Viv, I also don’t think all of that cosmetic surgery is such a good idea, however it is big business everywhere. Well said. I am finally making my rounds today on wordle poems, life is incredibly busy.

    Pamela

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  5. Misky says:

    Quite right, Viv. Wear it with pride is what I do.

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  6. oldegg says:

    Candlelight not only softens the features it softens the mood.

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  7. Amazing how you came up with a poem that is not only thoughtful poetry but uses all the words!

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  8. I love your approach to these words and your opening cycling round to you end…very gently beautiful, Viv!

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  9. julespaige says:

    Viv, you don’t have to change a thing. My first thought was of Joan Rivers…And well just how not real she looks. And then other actors who do nothing and do age gracefully. They’re not crows feet I tell ya – they are laugh lines and I love each and every one of ’em.

    I went ‘dark’ with this list, with my short piece:
    http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2013/02/sunday-whirl-96-short-elfje-quad-wave.html

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  10. peggygoetz says:

    This is wonderful Viv. Maybe that’s also the blessing of fading eye sight. I love the whole idea of a face reflecting a life well lived.

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  11. cecilia says:

    When i go out I will not even enter a bright restaurant, or wee bar. i love the low light it is so comforting.. great poem, saying exactly what we need to hear..good morning viv.. c

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  12. nan says:

    I like the closing instruction: stay in the gentle candlelight. Wisdom, for sure.

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  13. That’s it then, I am going to invest in candles and toss out my light bulbs. ๐Ÿ˜€

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  14. Beginning and ending with candlelight adds an aura of mystery and, as others have notice, gentleness to this paean to ageing. Tinker with it, if you will, but it’s pretty darn good the way it is!

    Whirling with Gary Soto

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  15. Laurie Kolp says:

    I agree… character, wisdom and experience comes with age… so why try to cover it up with botox and such.

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  16. Jae Rose says:

    Yes candlelight is a comfort..inside and out..

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  17. Stan Ski says:

    wysiwyg… Cold light of day… take it or leave it ๐Ÿ˜‰

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  18. Irene says:

    I thought these lines are core.

    Lacking signs of a life lived well ,
    all character has scurried away.

    Like it too.

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  19. 1sojournal says:

    I like it and want to see it after you tinker with it. There is such a tone of peaceful acceptance to this, and would be afraid to lose that,

    Elizabeth

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  20. drpkp says:

    Oh I do like this one Viv – it has gentled me off to sleep. Thank you – lovely poem ๐Ÿ™‚

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  21. I’ll think about it and get back to you ๐Ÿ™‚

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