Musical Sijo

http://namingconstellations.wordpress.com/category/reveries/ introduces a form that was new to me, the Korean sijo, which boils down to 3 lines of around 14 syllables

To quote http://www.sijopoetry.com/ “. . . .Remember the three characteristics that make the sijo unique — its basic structure, musical/rhythmic elements, and the twist. It is shorter and more lyrical than the ghazal. It is more roomy than the haiku, and it welcomes feelings and emotions which haiku either discourage or disguise. It should
please lovers of ballads, sonnets and lyrics, and the downplay of regular
meter and rhyme should appeal to writers of free verse.”

 And co-incidentally, http://dversepoets.com/2012/05/05/poetics-our-music/ wants us to write about music, so I combined the two.  Having already posted two poems today, the ideas that were germinating for the prompt have been put on hold.

 

The lyrical constituent of music is idyllic  
while systemic  rhythmic function contributes to the magic
with intangible comforting consequence – unless too loud.

 

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23 Responses to Musical Sijo

  1. Ah…Viv, I like your into. and wish I’d read it first because mine is not very musical! I really like how you describe the rhythm and your turning point or conclusion made me smile…so true!

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  2. cloudfactor5 says:

    Wow Viv, I really love how you cut to the core of this subject ! For music is something we can’t hold in our hands but can surely make you jump off the ground. Well Done !!

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  3. Misky says:

    I’m going to try this form today but I’m really unsure what’s required. You certainly created a beauty with yours though! 🙂

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  4. Viv, the lyrical/idyllic line was my favorite. You are so good with forms, and this one really worked for your subject. I agree about the music being too loud – had to laugh when I saw your response to Brian! Great pun. Peace, Amy

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  5. Love it, Viv! Though I still love some of the old rock songs of my youth.

    Pamela

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  6. You so rock my senses at times. I wrote a paper on loud once, I could have saved a lot of time if I would have read this then. One of my favs. Excellente!

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  7. A very interesting form and an enjoyable poem, Viv!

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  8. markwindham says:

    I been going around the house turning everything down for days, asking if my hearing has gotten better or if the rest of my family is losing theirs. My music only gets turned up loud enough to overcome my voice. I do like to sing along but have no business doing so.

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  9. Laurie Kolp says:

    I love the twist at the end… I’ll have to check out this form as it’s new to me, too.

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  10. whimsygizmo says:

    Excellent, Viv! Great prompt mashup! 🙂

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  11. b_y says:

    Got a good chuckle from this. Thanks.

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  12. zongrik says:

    very, very rhythmic!!

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  13. tashtoo says:

    Unless too loud…alas, I must agree…I have forsaken my days of bleeding ear drums and now lean more toward the poetry than the tune 😉 Loved this!

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  14. Mama Zen says:

    Clever write!

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  15. brenda w says:

    I like this one, Viv. While wordy, you picked some good ones. systemic, idyllic, intangible…

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  16. brian miller says:

    i dont mind it loud at all…
    i def appreciate good lyricism though and a great beat…

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  17. poemsofhateandhope says:

    ‘unless too loud’ ha ha ha- I’m actually quite like the wordiness of this form…just allows a little bit more breathing space maybe…certainly interesting…have to try one myself…. Great sentiment- music being Indylic and magical…except when it’s too loud ha ha….maybe this is why I’m going deaf!

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  18. David King says:

    Ha, the last three words had me chortling!

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  19. claudia says:

    haha..nice…systemic rhythmic function contributing to the magic
    with intangible comforting consequence…love this…and can music ever be too loud…? my son would say: no… i’d say: yes…smiles

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  20. Tilly Bud says:

    Not sure I like this form – it’s kind of wordy.

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    • vivinfrance says:

      I”m inclined to agree – the haiku makes us condense our thoughts to the nth degree. But if you read some of the examples on Joseph’s prompt, you will realise that mine is a pale imitation of what it should have been.

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