Changes for dverse poets

The End of an Era

The long, long room is empty, swept
of all the trappings of our life.
Dust swirls in cheerless sunlight       
pouring through the oddly clean glass.
One last look round. What have we forgotten?
Power turned off and fridge door open.
Bunch of keys on the counter top.
Will the new people love you as we did,
cosset the boiler on days when it sulks?
Will they dig up my roses, burn my clematis?

and the Start of the Next

Who would have thought
that we wouldn’t miss the House that Jock Built?
But we don’t.Five years into the new house
it seems we’ve always been here.
New garden productive,
new house perfect for our ageing needs.
Change revives us, energises:
what new adventures can we see?

an updated version of a poem written just after we moved for the nth time.  The update proves that change is to be welcomed.  Posted at http://dversepoets.com/2011/11/19/poetics-changes/

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16 Responses to Changes for dverse poets

  1. zumpoems says:

    I love how this starts — the “long, long room” — sometimes that is how one gets the idea over the most effectively — great judgement on your part. I enjoyed the shift of tone in the second section and the way this communicates so simply and directly. Very well done!

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  2. I really enjoyed the first version and love the changes. Viv, hope this finds you well and happy in your lovely home. Have the quilts been gifted to your Grandson yet? (I believe it was your Grandson). Much love from across the pond

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  3. Sheila Moore says:

    aw, change is good much of the time. glad this gave you the opportunity to change your original poem up a bit. I think it is lovely.

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  4. right on, love your way of change.

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  5. Shawna says:

    This is my favorite section:

    “The long, long room is empty, swept
    of all the trappings of our life.
    Dust swirls in cheerless sunlight
    pouring through the oddly clean glass.”

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  6. Victoria says:

    I loved this story…it is so reflective of what we experience in our later years, still enjoying new beginnings. But the details of your post do create that empty feeling of leaving the past behind.

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  7. Love your poem. This is the way life goes, nothing is permanent. Dianne

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  8. Tilly Bud says:

    I love change. Not for the sake of it, but when it is necessary. I love moving house. This is the longest I’ve lived in one place and I would love to move, mostly for the opportunity to slough off the old (clutter) and start afresh (getting more clutter).

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  9. yes. strange how places have spirits of themselves.

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  10. Mike Patrick says:

    Any house becomes a member of the family. You learn its aches and pains and how it responds to weather. In return, it shelters and protects you; but you speak of the house Jock built–a labor of love, almost the giving of birth. The photographs you hung, the furniture you chose, were the first clothes it ever wore. How difficult to leave behind.

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  11. David King says:

    This is big change, good change, very well handled.

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  12. Heaven says:

    i love the perspective… i think it is just a matter of getting used to it and you feel you belong ~

    happy day ~

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  13. claudia says:

    now that sounds like the right change at the right time..think that was a smart move..literally..

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  14. brian says:

    nice…change can refresh and revivie…moving can take a lot out of you, but the letting go of some things…the fresh perspective of a new home…most def…i have wanted to move for a while now..

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