Surreality

 http://dversepoets.com/  are surreal in their latest prompt, not my cup of tea at all.  Then, when I read Brenda’s wordle words,  http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/ became more of a possibility.  The tin lid was put on my surrealism when I read of a Welsh form at  http://carolspoetrypassion.blogspot.com/ in my blogroll and I persuaded myself, much against my will to have a go, kill three prompts with one bizarre poem.

The Clogyrnach, an ancient Welsh form,  contains thirty-two syllables in a six-line stanza. The first two lines have eight syllables each; the second two, five; the third two, three. The last two lines may be written as a single, six-syllable line. There are only two rhymes per stanza, and there can be any number of stanzas.

Technically, it looks like this:

x x x x x x x a
x x x x x x x a
x x x x b
x x x x b
x x b
x x a

The Wordle words are:  swept, torments, rusty, prophets, morning, crawling, cement, sun, tender, scars, notes, walk.  I used them all in one form or another, but haven’t succeeded in making any sense.  I think this is the first time I have used three prompts in one go.  Never again!

Surreality

The prophets of doom torment,
leaving their scars in wet cement
when they have crawled past
we notice at last,
walk fast
all spent.

In the warmth of the morning sun
relive memories one by one,
tenderly rehearse
them and intersperse
perverse
good  fun.

Making notes about history
remembering each victory
sweep away sadness
and rusty badness
madness,
glory.

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18 Responses to Surreality

  1. Kelly says:

    Wow – I am impressed! And what a fun form – very lyrical.

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  2. Carol says:

    Wow, I’m really impressed! The Clogyrnach is hard enough on its own, let alone when it’s combined with two other prompts. Great job!

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  3. Really good! I didn’t dare attempt that prompt.:)

    And thanks for your fun Limerick-Off contribution!

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  4. Traci B says:

    Yay, Viv! Three prompts in one, and a new form – fantastic, even if you’re not satisfied with the result. I may have to try this form, and if I do, I’ll mention your blog in my post. 🙂

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  5. pmwanken says:

    HOORAY for you, Viv!! See, combining prompts isn’t so hard! Now that you’ve done three, a four- or five-combo prompt is just around the corner. I, too, enjoyed the form. Rhyming’s not so easy for me, but I will have to keep this in mind to try sometime.

    By the way…in case you didn’t already see my reply, thanks for the comment on the Wordle site re: “Swept Away.” I copied/pasted it into a comment on my site, with a reply.

    ~Paula

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  6. Tilly Bud says:

    You have no fear! I am full of admiration that you tackled three prompts in one.

    I wrote a clogyrnach once and quite enjoyed it. Nothing on your scale, though.

    Well done!

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  7. 1sojournal says:

    I doubt I will try a form I can’t begin to wrap my mouth around. But that doesn’t prevent me from being impressed by what you have done, the wordle words are enough of a challenge for me, but then to add two more prompts and a new form? Hats off to you my friend,

    Elizabeth
    http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com

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  8. Mike Patrick says:

    I love any form that has you rhyming. You do it so well. Don’t hold your breath until you see me writing a Clogyrnach. I admire you for even attempting it, but you turned it into a great poem.

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  9. Susannah says:

    Three prompts in one AND a tricky poetic form. Phew! you certainly enjoy a challenge! 🙂 . . . ( you rose to it very well too.)

    You did a great job and I found it very interesting to learn about the Clogyrnach too. Nice one Viv.

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  10. Victoria says:

    What a great form…makes me want to try it and you wrote it so well. In the last stanza, is the last line missing? Good job.

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  11. pamelasayers says:

    Viv, a well written poem. I love the form, and may try it in the future. Impressive using three prompts.

    Pamela

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  12. TheMsLvh says:

    You did a wonderful job with this poem. Love the form Viv!

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