Sicilian Quintain

 http://poeticbloomings.blogspot.com/ is a challenging prompt site run by Maria Elena and Walt of Poetic Asides fame.  This week they give us the form Sicilian Quintain,    Written in Iambic Pentameter with a rhyme sequence of a.b.a.b.a. This form has been used by many great poets and, like the Tanka, it is a valid and wonderful poetry form in it’s own write. (sic 🙂 )

 An example written by Walt
A WASTE OF HEART

I stand before the god’s of love again,
and hope my fate is better than it was.
For things are not the way that they had been;
my heart still breaks the way a good heart does.
To lay a heart to waste is such a sin.

provoked my reply:-
For sin against correct apostrophe
Walt must be made to pay a heavy fine.
The gods of poesy in antistrophe
rise up in anger dire against his crime.
Take care, young man, avoid catastrophe.

This form has legs; be sure I shall return,
iambs deployed within a kinder verse,
discourtesy dispelled, scorn overturned,
never to complain in tones perverse.
I promise I will make a sharp u-turn.

The final line is the hardest, and given a choice, I would write quatrains! I may be drummed out of the Brownies!

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4 Responses to Sicilian Quintain

  1. Mike Patrick says:

    One can only hope he appreciates your editor’s eye as much as I do.

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  2. Tilly Bud says:

    So glad you pulled him up on it, Viv. A wandering apostrophe is a dreadful sin for a writer.

    Love this.

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  3. Traci B says:

    Well done, Viv! I wanted to excise that errant apostrophe of Walt’s too; I like your poetic approach to the situation. 🙂

    And I agree; that fifth line is a real challenge. That’s why my quintain ended up with three verses – the fifth line didn’t allow me to finish a thought neatly and stop there.

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