Haiku challenge 27/2/11

Eternal

how long it will take
for traffic lights to turn green
when I have no time
*

is the time it takes
to give birth to a baby;
grown up in a flash.

*

an unending void
I cannot comprehend it
and don’t wish to try

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17 Responses to Haiku challenge 27/2/11

  1. ladynimue says:

    the second haiku was fabulous !!

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  2. I love this Viv.. Thanks..

    Someone is Special

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  3. wow, love love your take.

    thought provoking.
    😉

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  4. time I gather is relative yet eternal, and impacting each and everyone of us in some way…no need to try to understand it of course 🙂 it just is

    Nicely detailed piece, thank you 🙂

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  5. cloakedmonk says:

    Wonderful capture of the tension of time.

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  6. Becca Givens says:

    Charming – what an awesome wake up to accompany my mug of blissfully hot coffee!! 😉

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  7. sonsy lass says:

    Fab-u-lous, Viv! So well-crafted and so true!

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  8. sarah says:

    awesome..indeed a refreshing take on ‘eternal’ ..i found them thoughtful and profound…coming from an experienced person like u 🙂

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  9. earlybird says:

    Good responses to the prompt, Viv.

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  10. Tilly Bud says:

    The first two very funny, but suggest you lose rep of ‘time’.

    The last one: ‘unending void’ – tautological?

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  11. You captured “eternal” beautifully!

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  12. Bodhirose says:

    I can relate to all these haiku, Viv. I enjoyed them too.

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  13. Mike Patrick says:

    Universal truths. There is another one you missed—waiting outside an occupied restroom.

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  14. Such wonderful and truthful examples of eternity! I can relate to the green light,lol.

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