Villanelle for Thursday Poet’s Rally

As a newbie at Thursday’s Poet’s Rally, please shout at me if I’ve put this in the wrong place!

Postman Villanelle 
I heard a footstep at my gate
and raised my eyes to see
the postman was, as usual, late.

My steps went to investigate
what news it brought to me,
that postman’s visit to my gate:

a symbol of the world so great,
words from across the sea.
The postman was, as usual, late.

Today a stranger at the gate
knocked and asked for me.
Bad news came through my gate:

so sad, you will appreciate,
he’s gone, too soon, you see.
I know now postman is ‘the late’.

I turn away, disconsolate
then back again to see,
as steps recede outside the gate,
the widow of the postman, late.

This is for: http://thursdaypoetsrallypoetry.wordpress.com/2010/09/08/agreement-4-poets-rally-week-28-participants/#comment-1048

 

 

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32 Responses to Villanelle for Thursday Poet’s Rally

  1. Olivia says:

    http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/2010/09/monday-poetry-potluck-kings-queens-and.html

    Hello, friend:

    Monday Poetry Potluck Is NOW open, linking is open from Sunday 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm, welcome join us by linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem, the more you share, the happier we are…hurry up!
    Thanks in advance.
    Hope to see you in our lovely potluck…

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  4. this the 2nd work of urs that i have read and iam already a fan….

    BRAVO !!!

    😀

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  5. dancingfreak says:

    awww 😦 that’s sad

    u still look forward to that post no matter who he is or how late he is….

    really touchy… nice write 🙂 liked it a lot 🙂

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  6. Anky0112 says:

    I turn away, disconsolate
    then back again to see,
    as steps recede outside the gate,
    the widow of the postman, late.

    interesting read… i could picture the feelings well….

    happy weekend,
    viva la vida 🙂

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  7. Kavita says:

    Oohh.. nicely written… inspite of the rules of a villanelle, the story in the poem flowed smoothly..
    Sad read.. but nicely done!
    Thanks..

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  8. The last stanza is a remarkable piece of work (the whole piece is) but the last stanza is incredible. Bisous, Love and Light, Sender

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  9. mairmusic says:

    She know pantoums and she writes villanelles too– I can see we will be happy co-readers. I love the transformation of the repeated lines. I haven’t tried that yet. Nicely written!
    http://mairmusic.wordpress.com/

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  10. Jingle says:

    Happy Friday, I hope that you enjoy NEW poetry friends here.

    🙂

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  11. joanny says:

    You have done a lovely penned ‘Villanelle’, sad though but beautifully written.

    I am familiar with this style, but have yet to pen one my self. I do appreciate your web link and the little book for reference I am sure they are both very useful, so I will copy and book mark them for future use.

    I hope there wasn’t some personal truth to this one…

    Welcome to the rally,

    Joanny
    http://thedowsersdaughter.blogspot.com/

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  12. tillybud says:

    I love this; one of your best. Amusing, tells a story and great rhymes. Viv, you are such a master of the villanelle they should rename it the vivanelle!

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  13. GJK says:

    Nice work! I especially like your use of “disconsolate.” It’s one of those great words that people rarely use.

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  14. Someone Is Special says:

    I loved your take man… Lovely Villanelle…

    Happy Rally…

    Sweet Dish

    –Someone Is Special–

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  15. Madison says:

    The rhythm is stunning! Great piece, darling.

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  16. dasuntoucha says:

    Hey anyboby who can make a Villanelle flow this smooth is alright in my book…(^_^)

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  17. buttercup600 says:

    How sad….wonderful vilanelle. Never tried them before, well penned my friend!

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  18. Outstanding! Great word use, great everything, I loved this!

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  19. woih says:

    I feel so bad for the widow
    Now I’m sad
    amazing connection

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  20. amanda says:

    Thanks for introducing me to the vilanelle, I looked it up so I could better understand it, I may have to give it a try. Welcome to the Rally!

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  21. Chris G. says:

    Great vilanelle! Strong rhythm, which serves to draw out the power of the poem.

    Thanks for the comments on my board, and a happy rally to you!

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  22. Skillfully done Villanelle. I think that is one of the hardest forms to do…I’ve only done one but maybe you’ll inspire me to try again. Merci mille fois.

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  23. frayedges says:

    Oh! How sad. I loved the meter and rhythm to this one. It really brought out the feeling.

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  24. Hi! First, thank you so much for your wonder-full comments on my blog! I’m honoured by your presence.

    Second: For some reason I came across this poetic form late last week and have been playing with it. I enjoy it so much and your villanelle is outstanding!

    When I post one of mine I’ll let you know!

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    • vivinfrance says:

      The greatest help with formal poetry is a little book by Stephen Fry, called “The Ode Less Travelled” which has been my guide through many a tricky assignment while studying during the last couple of years. Another helpful site
      – a guide to verse forms – is: http://www.volecentral.co.uk/vf/index.htm

      I have been trying to work my way through the list, but there are still dozens that I haven’t yet tried!

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  25. hi Vivienne 😀 what a nice vilanelle 😀 I’ve only attempted a couple b4, but its not come out this well.. good one..

    mine for the rally is ~here~

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  26. Jingle says:

    Hope that you have fun,
    visit and comment for 18 is minimum,
    but if you visit and comment for all participants,
    within three days, they will all come back here and tickle you with compliments…

    I trust your work,
    I truly enjoy your contribution here.
    fabulous read for the day!
    🙂

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  27. Jingle says:

    outstanding contribution…

    investigate, postman late….

    love the perfect rhymes…
    super beautiful piece!
    🙂

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