The Kiss

A puff of air fluffs onto my face,
wafts a hint of mint towards me.
The soft moist touch of skin
flickers across my eyelids,
creeps down my cheeks.
dots little pecks on the way.
Firm pressure parts my lips
thought stops,
sensation takes over.

Meeting the Bar at dVerse Poets’ Pub is asking us to write without using our eyes, concentrate on other sens.  This was VERY difficult!

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24 Responses to The Kiss

  1. lynndiane says:

    Tender sweetness…vivent le basier!

  2. rmp says:

    I would imagine thoughts would completely cease. really lovely.

  3. Karen says:

    OoooH, la-la! Smiles here!

  4. Viv. Viv. How beautiful. You have captured the intimacy of a real kiss – a knowing kiss shared by two in love. So sensual! Amy

  5. hypercryptical says:

    Oh so beautifully sensuous – sensation takes over indeed.
    Anna :o]

  6. lucychili says:

    it was difficult but great results =) this seems like an Amelie kiss. =)

  7. Glenn Buttkus says:

    The gentleness is overpowering, seductive, leading to the heat, when touch intensifies, when mind fog rolls in, when eros begin to steer the ship.

  8. Linda says:

    Beautifully sensual piece. Intimate, fresh – moreso. ;)

  9. Well, at least you had a kiss to write about. What am I to do, here alone? hee hee. Loved this, Viv!

  10. kaykuala says:

    It certainly moved smoothly, tinged with lots of goodness in feel. Wonderful shot Viv!

    Hank

  11. billgncs says:

    butterfly kisses :)

  12. wolfsrosebud says:

    i enjoyed the softness in this

  13. It certainly didn’t read like it was difficult. One thing I noticed (that I often overlook) was the most effective use of internal rhyme.

  14. Laurie Kolp says:

    This is lovely, Viv.

  15. Brian Miller says:

    oo la…very nice…i like the anticipation the small touches that lead up to that moment when you are taken away….smiles….mint, not bad…smiles.

  16. Ooh, a lovely kiss… mmm :)

  17. colonialist says:

    That should certainly arouse … interest! :)

  18. claudia says:

    hmmmm nice… i love kissing…ha… who doesn’t… fresh brushed teeth or not…smiles

  19. I really like the details the mint the sensation… really a great and sensuous take Viv.. lovely.

  20. Mary says:

    Oh, I really like the sensuality of this, Viv!

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