TV detective
examined all evidence;
real one simply guessed
Either way’s the same:
each came to the conclusion -
the dead guy was gassed
*
Trees soon will be bare -
the last knockings of summer
nine months from New Year
*
Consider the smooth
progression across the gears
as balm for engines
*
His number was up
in nineteen-ninety eight
Frank’s final curtain
*
White is a colour
much brighter than all others -
it is made of light
*
To refresh the page
you must press the key F 5
everything will shift
Like the selection of words from a collection of Sunday Whirl poets, my haiku are mostly unrelated.
A fine selection of haiku – each one complete!
“Gassed” was one of the tricky words – I enjoyed your haiku. I’ve been playing with tanka and renga…I seem to need just a few more words than haiku to tell my little snippets. I watch quite a few crime shows and enjoyed that first pair very much.
I had fun with ‘gassed’ here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/09/sw-72-doughboy.html
Viv, I love when you string these haiku together, because there is always a shift (!) from whimsy to beauty. “He was gassed.” I almost made mine about a drunkard (different kind of “gassed”), but went for war instead. Peace, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2012/09/05/nurse-in-the-field-afghanistan/
Sometimes cohesive goes out the window. You strung your thought and poems together and used the words given. Sometimes that’s enough. But all great little tidbits on their own.
an intriguing set…some seemed to complement each other, and some didn’t…..always keep ‘em guessing…
I first felt all the words would fit nicely into a race of some sort — but my first attempt sounded like a very uninteresting sports announcer.
Then I gave it a couple days and a different direction came to me. I’ve not gone in the route you’ve taken with unrelated haiku, but I must remember this the next time the words don’t seem to want to connect. (And…we know there WILL be a next time…) Well done!
*hugs*
It felt like a bit of a cop out, but I found myself enjoying it anyway! I seem to be in haiku mode thanks to the HH September challenge.
This was fun Viv, what you’ve done with the words. I’m probably being thick but I must confess the one about New Year’s being nine months from bare trees knocking has me confused … is “knocking” a colloquialism for something I might not be familiar with? Sorry, like I say – it’s likely just me.
http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/09/last-scene.html
Last knockings is a slang expression for the end of something – eg last gasp!
ohhh – gotcha – thanks Viv!
I have to agree with you Viv, these words didn’t seem all that cohesive. Had to keep going back and taking another look and finding only bits and pieces. That process seems to take longer each week. And you are wrong, your words are not obvious because your haiku are well structured and the words fall into place with the movement.
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/09/02/unknowing-flight/
Thanks for the “refresher” on F5.
I really like the “balm for engines.” It leaves me wondering if a world of auto mechanic poets exists out there somewhere. These are all excellent, Viv!
I’m so pleased to see you adopt this format and work it well, Viv. Each one is a delight to read!
Whirling with Jane Kenyon
I enjoyed each one!
I enjoy haiku very much and you have some gems here. I like this different approach to the Whirl.
Lots of gems here, Viv. Sometimes good things come in small packages. My favorite was the one about “white.”
These are fun and clever. I especially liked the last!
I like it when wordlers use all the words in different poems.
Oooh, I like these a lot. Even though you said they’re unrelated, it was fun to look for relation in the haikus. It’s like they’re separate but at the same time not. Lovely =)
Oooh Viv … I really like these … not certain if you intended them as a cohesive series but they certainly are … edgy and different… delightful !