Today’s prompt at Haiku Heights is « soul ». This, being one of those words poetry tutors don’t like, didn’t inspire me until I was sending an email to a poeming friend and this stanza from an old poem leapt out at me! I adapted the middle line to conform to the 7-syllable dictat.
Never use two words
in places where one will do.
Brevity, soul of…
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Like minds in sync….shortest haiku I’ve read, yet long in meaning…
“I adapted the middle line to conform to the 7-syllable dictat.
I.e, added two more words where no more would do. Except the count would be off.
Perhaps you could have economized and written an ‘American haiku.’
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Oh my aching soul
forgot to say that your piece
is a nice senryu.
I like Jock’s party piece song.
It is better than the ones I try to sing.
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Delightfully amusing haiku.
Wow! Ur haiku aptly describes a haiku!
Bathing under the twilight
Perfect for the theme ~
Absolutely perfect!
I had a high school teacher who’s mantra was “omit needless words”. She said it always and often. 45 years later and I still can’t push her “mute” button.
Ha! I just did some haiku too but I like yours better!