A pewter sea beating against a pewter sky
sends flocks of gulls inland for green security
from intractable storm. Squandering energy
in their haste, they follow alleys and lanes,
eyes ever seeking lush fields
where they can ride out the storm.
That was my first pedestrian attempt at this week’s wordle words. Then I got really silly
A disparate list of intractable verbiage beats
at my will as I accommodate clumsily
squander recklessly, follow blindly
the flocks of reluctant poets
wherever Brenda sends us
along alley and green lane
onward to pewter sea,
eyes seeking refuge
from Wordle war.
Much better!
Hi, Viv! I liked the opening line of your first…it gave me a real monotone mirrored feeling of green, very poignant! Your second had me grinning, while you say it was silly the words fit seamlessly!! Smiles to you!!
The first painted some excellent pictures, but the second blew it right out of that pewter sea! I loved it.
Viv, that second one…made me burst out loud with laughter! Thank you!
You can fine my contribution here…
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/04/lackluster-lackey-sunday-whirl-wordle.html
And ack…I found another word list and wrote a squeal!…here:
http://julesgemsandstuff.blogspot.com/2012/04/egress-and-ingress-for-monday-melting.html
But wait for daylight, while not scary…they are not of lighter fare.
l liked both poems, but got giggles from the second.
Ah just what I needed – your tongue-in-cheek silliness with these words offers just the right stopping point for the evening.
Wonderful and very clever!
‘A pewter sea beating against a pewter sky’
That is visually powerful – and I can hear the ‘metallic’ clamour; an image worth its own family of stanzas, free of the remaining prompts.
I really liked the pewter sea and the pewter sky.. c
Chuckle
I especially loved your Wordle war.
The first poem, not so pedestrian. You painted a very clear word picture. The second poem, nicely done! Wordle Wars. I love alliteration!
Love it
Viv, the second one made me laugh. I haven’t even finished mine. I wrote two lines last night and gave up. My brain seems addled right about now.
Pamela
The opening of the first one marks it as not at all pedestrian. Love the second one because it is vibrant with wordle angst and makes me feel so not alone. It is definitely a love/hate relationship. Thanks for a good morning laugh Viv,
Elizabeth
http://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2012/04/29/the-dream/
Woa. I felt like I was tumbling into a hole during the 2nd part. I think it’s the pace of it. I like it!
hahaha…as always, I love it, Viv.
http://lkharris-kolp.blogspot.com/2012/04/as-i-watched-you-go.html
Delightful!
Echoing the other comments, I love the second one, too. This is an excellent write, Viv. Excellent. As a bird lover, the first piece opens with a stunning visual.
I enjoyed the first, and LOVED the second.
Well, it might be silly, the second one, but it’s fun. My mind is now visualising your sea versus my character, as we have used so many words in the same way but going in opposite directions, in the first.
I loved the second one. Can picture all of us following along, Brenda being a kind of Pied Piper. LOL.
Honk Honk… here I waddle… Delightful Viv
Giggles! We’re in the same flock of geese summoned by Brenda.
The second one is brilliant! Fabulous line: flocks of reluctant poets
I can see us all huddling together, moving like geese after bread on the park.
In turn, yours is a beautiful word picture.
LOL! I loved the second one. Very funny!